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Man From Gallifrey
by ElegantButler

Long ago and far away
I met a man from Gallifrey
Who did not have much to say
But "Goodbye" and "Hello"

He said "I'll be back yesterday
And I will take you far away
So pack your bags tomorrow
And prepare yourself to go."

Tarry not. No delay.
With the man from Gallifrey

Through Daleks and through Cybermen
We wove our way and back again
As Angels wept and secrets kept
By Silence never told

We counted shadows ran when two
And by and by and through and through
With nothing much for us to do
We trod the paths of old.

Tarry not. No delay
With the man from Gallifrey.
A song inspired by Doctor Who
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This style reminds me of an old ballad, but now its about the Doctor! The rhyming scheme that you wrote was one of the first things that caught my attention.

You didn't fully let the audience "relax"--so to speak--at the end of the first half. You kept me wondering how you were going to complete that rhyme and still keep the flowing rhythm, and you pleasantly surprised me as I came to the end of the verse. It was very well done.

The brief account from the point of view from the Companion was really neat to think about, and I'm glad you made it that way. I also liked how you mentioned the various aliens into the second verse, and the little chorus was very charming.

Overall, nicely done.
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